tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1399869498342967494.post7459867610857678714..comments2023-06-30T08:26:00.855-07:00Comments on Freelance Talents Championship: Round 1 (Match # 6) - Mohit Sharma vs. Yogesh Amana Gurjarमोहित शर्मा ज़हनhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12979909281618347352noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1399869498342967494.post-55268455923781238612013-06-16T13:34:37.810-07:002013-06-16T13:34:37.810-07:00@Pandey..theme dark to hai but mujhe laga ke langu...@Pandey..theme dark to hai but mujhe laga ke language and word construction ne uski darkness kam karr di. Tumhe nahi laga??<br /><br />Dickensian skill of euphenising according to me!!Srishti Yash Mudaliarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07087112604387228921noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1399869498342967494.post-22213263139538525342013-06-16T13:32:18.751-07:002013-06-16T13:32:18.751-07:00This comment has been removed by the author.Srishti Yash Mudaliarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07087112604387228921noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1399869498342967494.post-20482726053873453932013-06-16T13:27:32.686-07:002013-06-16T13:27:32.686-07:00The first story has got the settings of the Indian...The first story has got the settings of the Indian city, though the poverty in the villages has been very well highlighted. The main show but is the "India Politics". Rape, dowry and ignorance, I believe are the parts of politics. This dirty politics is a world-wide phenomenon. Untouchabilty is another ground touched that could be considered paralel to 'racism'. So must say I didn't see much "Indian Society" in the first story. The story ended with a message "as you sow, so shall you reap" that I really appreciate. At an instance we shall find that there is more that it says. "One good deed done in past might rescue one from the worst adversities" in my words, and as I percept. Ela's bravery, rather humanity touched me. As a story I loved it!! The language construction, proper verbal usage, the structure on paragraphs and dialogues is noteworthy and engrossing. So muah, muah to writer (who doesn't seem his young age :D) !! <br /><br />The second story is set in a beautiful Indian village. It has a holy and pleasant environment that makes me feel morning fresh. It touches the holiness of India. T prime religion, rituals of paying respect to plants and animals, childhood in India and some unique little things have been beautifully described. So a part of the society which is unique to India could be found in the work. Lack of variety in punctuations, however, makes reading drowsy. Moreover I find the story somewhat based on "Gandhian Ideology", so won't say that I am very much pleased with the originality.<br /><br />Feel lucky to read both the awesome stories :)<br />Srishti Yash Mudaliarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07087112604387228921noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1399869498342967494.post-53271872345071566422013-06-15T14:19:54.692-07:002013-06-15T14:19:54.692-07:00Deven Bhai, bahut shukriya aapka. Mai ek kisaan ki...Deven Bhai, bahut shukriya aapka. Mai ek kisaan ki tarah hun aur mere aam k baagh hai. Ab dikkat ye hai ki abhi tak jo zyadatar kahaniyan, kavitayen, lekh aadi aapne padhi meri likhi wo Dark kism k pedon ki thi...mere baagiche ki baaki prajatiyan bhi chakhiye. :)मोहित शर्मा ज़हनhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12979909281618347352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1399869498342967494.post-59386712695073259382013-06-15T13:58:15.169-07:002013-06-15T13:58:15.169-07:00आपकी कहानी काफी पसंद आई मोहित भाई ,पसंद तो काफी आई...आपकी कहानी काफी पसंद आई मोहित भाई ,पसंद तो काफी आई भाई<br />लेकिन एक शिकायत रह गयी<br />अरे यार कहानिया इतनी डार्क क्यों बनाते हो ? क्या आपने कोई डिप्लोमा किया है क्या डार्क कहानियों पर ? त्रासदी ही त्रासदी क्यों है इतनी आपकी अधिक् तर कहानियों में ? ...अंत तक जिल्लत झेलती हुयी एक इमानदार लडकी जिसे शायद ही कभी खुशियों को महसूस किया हो वह अंत तक तकलीफ सहती रही ,कभी किसी रूप में तो कभी किसी रूप में , मुकद्दर में इतने गम क्यों है भाई ..इमानदारी हमेशा इतनी बेबस क्यों होती है ?Deven Pandeyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15739324566139903599noreply@blogger.com